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Uncomfortable Silence
Hours passing almost too easily
After the warm rain
Wipes the stench clean
What do I do then?
What can I be?

What kind of a man
Works till the end
To eat at his table
To sleep in his bed

And who can claim the right
To take away the life
Of a man who spent his time
Living through the fight

So tell me the truth
To be the real you
You gotta to sell your soul to the
Highest Bidder

This can’t be right

Turning out the light

It wasn’t long ago
The man I used to know is gone to me
Give me what power
You said I could have
Lies are no new thing
Wish I remembered that

And what kind of man
Works till his end
To eat at his table
To sleep in his bed

And who can claim the right
To take away the life
Of a man who spent his time
Living through the fight

So tell me the truth
To be the real you
You gotta to sell your soul to the
Highest Bidder

This can’t be right

Turning out the light

What’s the name on the headstone
A terrible lie
I no not my name
I know not my life
What’s the name on the headstone
The message beneath
They sowed and I reaped
The life they gave to me

And who can claim the right
To take away the life
Of a man who spent his time
Living through the fight

So tell me the truth
To be the real you
You gotta to sell your soul to the
Highest Bidder

This can’t be right

Turning out the light
©2005-2009 ~Auza065
:iconauza065:

Author's Comments

A song I wrote in a day. I'm amazed it turned out so well given that I've worked on songs for years and they turn out like crap...

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:iconanimadictsaiyuki:
^.^ Very good..... and quiet impactive.

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"I do you a solid. You do me solid. That's how it works."

~Anubis/Antabis, Stephen King's Kingdom Hospital
:iconauza065:
I'm glad it turned out that way. Coming up with lyrics on the fly doesn't turn out so well most of the time, so just letting it get itself down turned out okay, it seems.

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"For he has died, he has no more room for death in him." --Lao Tzu (Tao Te Ching)
:iconanimadictsaiyuki:
Yea....

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"I do you a solid. You do me solid. That's how it works."

~Anubis/Antabis, Stephen King's Kingdom Hospital
:iconchaosreborn:
Beautiful

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Die like men, and leave pretty corpses
:iconsilent-insanity:
"So tell me the truth
To be the real you
You gotta to sell your soul to the
Highest Bidder
"

Very impacting on how you think about the mood of the song and my favorite lines of your chorus. I also like the rhyming scheme, how some verses rhyme every other line while some of them don't. It gives the song it's own beat to sing inside your head. You should get music to it, like guitars and drums and bass guitars. Yeah, that would be cool. :)

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:bulletgreen: :bulletblue: .. your smile rivals all the rainbows .. :bulletblue: :bulletgreen:
:iconauza065:
I've gotten an accoustic guitar melody, and a bit of drums in with the song when I sing it to myself, and the only time it really gets bigger than the accoustic and my voice is during the "headstone" bridge, which is when the drums hit in, and a bass accompanies the accoustic. Wish I could record it and post it, it sounds really good in my head.

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"For he has died, he has no more room for death in him." --Lao Tzu (Tao Te Ching)

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